The worst lunch day ever. (First Draft)

It was a beautiful day in the African Savannah. I did not want to migrate with the herd because It scares me.

And my mum and dad almost got eaten alive and I got  but I was lucky my dad saved me . The crocodile and the lions played tug of war with me and it was scary. Because  they are my enemies!

I  was taking a walk along the river bank when I saw my dad stop in his tracks. He roared to tell the herd to run. But I was slow  the lions caught me and I fell in the warm slimy  water and it was scary for me. And I could taste the yuck dirty water. I could hear  the herd of buffalos.

And the crocodile and the lions had a tug of war with me. The crocodile sunk its massive teeth into my tail it felt very very sore. I did not like it. It was scary for me. And I smelt yucky like the lion's breath.

I was saved by the herd of buffalos and I was scared. I did not like it. And I wish to see you again and fight once. I was happy and sore when I went back to the herd.

The calf's very very bad day.( First Draft)

Term 2 Week 3

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

First Draft

The calf's very very bad day.

“I was taking a walk along the river bank when I saw my dad stop in his tracks. He roared to tell the herd to run. But I was slow  the lions caught me and I fell in the warm slimy  water and it was scary for me. And I could taste the yuck dirty water. I could hear  the herd of buffalos.

And the crocodile and the lions had a tug of war with me. The crocodile sunk its massive teeth into my tail. I did not like it. It was scary for me. And I smelt yucky like the lion's breath.”

I was saved by the herd of buffalos and I was scared. I did not like it. And I wish to see you again and fight once. I was happy and sore when I went back to the herd.