About my holiday.

On Tuesday and Wednesday of the school holidays I went to Timaru and Ashburton with my Dad to help him with his work. My dad works at Basick transport and he delivers boxes

Me , Mum, Irie, Taisyn,Tasharn went to Hornby Preschool and we got picked up by my Dad. I got in the truck and we started driving to Ashburton. It took us 2 hours to get to ashburton. We played a game called car cricket and car colour, it was fun.

we delivered at a Fudge making place. I got two big Pieces of caramel and chocolate Fudge and we also went to a sprinkle making place. I got to make sprinkles and I called it chocolate hail. It took us 5 hours to get to Timaru. When we got to timaru we done a delivery.

And when we got ashburton we got two pies each and two drinks each. I also fell asleep and when we got to timaru we got another pie they were yummy I got mince and Cheese  pies. Also another drink.

Then we got to place makers and we dropped off 1 pellet and 14 boxes.

I felt happy and it was fun next time i want play on the playground.


I want to go to Timaru again it was amzing

The worst lunch day ever. (First Draft)

It was a beautiful day in the African Savannah. I did not want to migrate with the herd because It scares me.

And my mum and dad almost got eaten alive and I got  but I was lucky my dad saved me . The crocodile and the lions played tug of war with me and it was scary. Because  they are my enemies!

I  was taking a walk along the river bank when I saw my dad stop in his tracks. He roared to tell the herd to run. But I was slow  the lions caught me and I fell in the warm slimy  water and it was scary for me. And I could taste the yuck dirty water. I could hear  the herd of buffalos.

And the crocodile and the lions had a tug of war with me. The crocodile sunk its massive teeth into my tail it felt very very sore. I did not like it. It was scary for me. And I smelt yucky like the lion's breath.

I was saved by the herd of buffalos and I was scared. I did not like it. And I wish to see you again and fight once. I was happy and sore when I went back to the herd.

The calf's very very bad day.( First Draft)

Term 2 Week 3

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

First Draft

The calf's very very bad day.

“I was taking a walk along the river bank when I saw my dad stop in his tracks. He roared to tell the herd to run. But I was slow  the lions caught me and I fell in the warm slimy  water and it was scary for me. And I could taste the yuck dirty water. I could hear  the herd of buffalos.

And the crocodile and the lions had a tug of war with me. The crocodile sunk its massive teeth into my tail. I did not like it. It was scary for me. And I smelt yucky like the lion's breath.”

I was saved by the herd of buffalos and I was scared. I did not like it. And I wish to see you again and fight once. I was happy and sore when I went back to the herd.

Battle at Kruger National Park Sequence.

                                                   W.A.L.T recall events in order

	The herd of buffalo are walking along the river bank.
	The lions are resting in the sun.
	The lions are looking at the buffalos  and are ready to pounce on them.
	The lions are chasing the buffaloes away.
	The lions are chasing the buffalos.
	The lions are playing tug of war with a calf and a crocodile.
	The buffaloes are chasing the lions.
	The herd of buffalos saved the calf.
	The baby Buffalo is rescued by the herd of buffalo.